The following is the opening paragraph of an essay on diversity which the student felt lacked a clear introduction and “hook”.
Diversity is about learning from others who are not the same, about dignity and respect for all, and about being open to learning about our differences. I know that for myself that I treat everyone [...]

Here’s the first paragraph of an ESL student’s essay in which he argues against the development of weapons of mass destruction.
Humanity versus humanity can be hell on earth. Humans have made guns and different kinds of weapons, but the worst thing is that humans have made weapons of mass destruction. Examples of this are the [...]

The following is the first paragraph of a cover letter from a biotech student in France.
Dear Madam, Dear Sir,
I am presently a student in biotechnology “health and medical engineering” at University of Grenoble. For my Master 1 diploma (French equivalent to an Msc), a work experience of at least 11 weeks (starting from April with [...]